Post 10

Having not finished the full seven pages of the proposal in my draft version, the first step in improving my paper will be to add several more paragraphs that expand on how we might further remove the stigma surrounding bipolar disorder. I have yet to mention the idea that high schools might have a required class or seminar talking about the realities of mental disorder. 

In regards to editing and revising what is already written, there are several things I would like to improve upon/ change.

1. I will add more sources and include more citations

2. I plan on going into more detail regarding what questions should be asked when speaking with a person diagnosed with bipolar disorder. 

3. I will expand upon how people might help to rid themselves of preconceived notions regarding mental disorders.

4. I will give more specific examples of how people shame those with mental disorders so that we might avoid them. 

5. I will go more in depth about the biology of mental disorders. 

Lastly, I will improve upon grammar trying as a whole to improve the entire structure and flow of the paper.